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This Is How It Started by `queenhrosie:iconqueenhrosie:



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Your face like a freshly dug hole.
How it started: the rage, the dead cat
that you told me to bury and forget
about.  Your face like the oriole I found

with chewed off wings, cranial sutures
opening.  I like that you are vertical
and black.  I like that you are a huge
flat slab while sleeping.  How it started:

we said good morning, but it wasn't.
Your face like a soldier sweeping for
mines.  I like that you wear rabbit
wigs.  Tiger gloves.  I like that you

think love is irrelevant, we are too
smart to believe that it isn't on the
verge of extinction.  Your face is
pharaoh or vulture, depending on

the light.  Your face is the very last
vestige of blood on a neck or spine.
How it started: natural enemies,

owl and crow eating breakfast
together,eyeing each other
suspiciously over tea cakes.  Owl
likes crow's waxy secretions.  
Crow likes the way owl's wings
bend around to seem as if he is

always in prayer.  Your
face like a polygamist favoring
one woman over all the others.

Your face like a freshly dug grave.
This is how it starts: shoveling
at the edge of a garden, covering
the evidence with hard dirt.

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©2009 `queenhrosie
:iconqueenhrosie:

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:iconanavah:
You never fail to disappoint and are always a steady bamboo blade rotating dA air so it never becomes stagnant. Just one thing:

Compared to the following imagery of how the "Crow likes the way owl's wings bend around to seem as if he is always in prayer." This part is confusing and seems disjointed.

Owl likes the way crow's
waxy secretions.

Also,

Your face like a freshly dug hole.
Your face like a freshly dug grave.

I love these inferences to death, forgetting and burying the evidence.

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Thank you.
:iconmopofearth:
brilliant, as ever :heart:

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Been there. Done that. Got the t-shirt. It didn't come in my size.
:iconqueenhrosie:
"the way crow's waxy secretions" has been changed. I noticed it after I posted (planned on writing something else, haha).

Yes, indeed. And thank you.

*!*

--
I hear
your voice
down the hall, through the window, above
all those trees, a light
it seems
& you are singing. What song
is that The words
are beautiful.

-LeRoi Jones
:iconqueenhrosie:
thanks!

*!*

--
I hear
your voice
down the hall, through the window, above
all those trees, a light
it seems
& you are singing. What song
is that The words
are beautiful.

-LeRoi Jones
:iconanavah:
You're very welcome. It was my pleasure.

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No need to thank me for "Faves" or Watches; however, if you feel the need, please do so in my Shoutbox.

Thank you.
:iconejectionletter:
I like that you

think love is irrelevant, we are too
smart to believe that it isn't on the
verge of extinction.


this makes me feel sturdy.
:iconposhlost:
Did you learn how to do this in writing school or are you just brilliant? What are your thoughts on writing school?

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"Odi et amo. Quare id faciam, fortasse requiris.
Nescio, sed fieri sentio et excrucior."
- Catullus
:iconqueenhrosie:
You mean, like, college? I have no idea what you're talking about! Haha!!

*!*

--
I hear
your voice
down the hall, through the window, above
all those trees, a light
it seems
& you are singing. What song
is that The words
are beautiful.

-LeRoi Jones
:iconqueenhrosie:
Love poems with truth hurrah!

*!*

--
I hear
your voice
down the hall, through the window, above
all those trees, a light
it seems
& you are singing. What song
is that The words
are beautiful.

-LeRoi Jones

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