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The Thing About Poetry by `queenhrosie:iconqueenhrosie:



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-is that you have to keep a person's attention.
No one cares that you just fell in love.  It's
obvious, the way he holds you like a crane,
sticks his face into you as if you were a nest.  

I don't mind, but I don't care to read about it.  
Love poems are difficult, they make people
jealous or afraid.  Here's something that will

get their attention in a poem: playing
horseshoes last July, your  mother having a
miscarriage in the bathroom, your father
pulling a curl out of his eyeball, remarking on
the Jenna Jameson controversy.  But even

that seems like I am trying to make my life
more interesting than it really is.  The thing
about poetry is that it is almost impossible
to write about eating potato chips on the
sofa and feeling happy and make it beautiful

enough.  Being happy is never beautiful
enough, we want to cry.  Here's something
that will make me never forget you: the
Christmas lights making weird colors in the
snow, your boyfriend beating the shit out of
your face, and you, thinking all of this is not

important.
  You go home, schedule an
irrelevant surgery for something fun like
breasts or claws.  You write a poem about

sitting there and how sitting there is not
important.  I like the way you think, is what
I would say to you if I could.  The way you
bend metaphor backwards as if it is an angry

body coming at you too fast.  The way you
have of ignoring what happened tonight in
favor of your mittens, written into a poem
so that the person reading it knows you
are angry, but not about what.

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©2009 `queenhrosie
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I was about to fall asleep when I realized I had made this poem like a house.







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The Thing About Poetry by =queenhrosie is an exploration of reasons why poems don't work. While explaining this, queenhrosie manages to create a stunning poem herself. (Suggested by =moonfreak and Featured by ^LadyLincoln)

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:iconqueenhrosie:
I wrote this because I have some theories about poetry and because I am really sick of boring poems and because I like writing around how I am feeling instead of through it.

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--
I hear
your voice
down the hall, through the window, above
all those trees, a light
it seems
& you are singing. What song
is that The words
are beautiful.

-LeRoi Jones
:iconmegsmad:
i like this comment as much as i like the poem

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Remember Hannah. news article --> [link] TV program --> [link] Depression should never be fought alone.
:iconqueenhrosie:
I have no idea how much coffee/and/or/and/or energy drinks I had today and it bothers me that I can no longer sleep.

*!*

--
I hear
your voice
down the hall, through the window, above
all those trees, a light
it seems
& you are singing. What song
is that The words
are beautiful.

-LeRoi Jones
:iconqueenhrosie:
I really want to do a 'news article' about writing poetry that 'keeps people interested' but #1 I am not interested in this poem anymore and #2 I only do things like that when I am being an asshole.

*!*

--
I hear
your voice
down the hall, through the window, above
all those trees, a light
it seems
& you are singing. What song
is that The words
are beautiful.

-LeRoi Jones
:iconposhlost:
YES.

--
"Odi et amo. Quare id faciam, fortasse requiris.
Nescio, sed fieri sentio et excrucior."
- Catullus
:iconposhlost:
PS This is all sorts of amazing.

--
"Odi et amo. Quare id faciam, fortasse requiris.
Nescio, sed fieri sentio et excrucior."
- Catullus
:iconottersandsky:
I think you've made a very shrewd statement about poetry, here. Maybe even partially explained that gap between what a poet thinks the audience wants and what the truth about that is. I like this part especially:

The way you
bend metaphor backwards as if it is an angry

body coming at you too fast. The way you
have of ignoring what happened tonight in
favor of your mittens, written into a poem
so that the person reading it knows you
are angry, but not about what.


Also your comment to yourself. Around and not through. I like that. :heart:
:iconanavah:
So be the asshole that gets everyone's attention. It'd be worth it for decent poetry.

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:iconanavah:
Sever the cord of Eros and bleed in the afterbirth.

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:iconanavah:
I don't know whether to save this to poetry or philosophy. I think the latter would accomplish your point.

And I meant to say good poem but was busy wiping up.

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